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[Madness Ascent]

Just here to drop a review with substance.

It is good, that's clear to see. But there are a couple of problems. The main one being that most of the lines are sloppy. Most for the stuff in the background and the Tricky clown's sword. Which is also another problem, when has Tricky ever used a sword? I remember him having a stop sign usually. But either item looks badass when rising from a pool of a lava. Which I assume is under them and kind of doesn't make sense. By the way, is that Jesus at the top? It seems a little inappropriate to place him on that pedestal considering the Madness series revolves around Hank and the two other dudes for the '.5' episodes. But it's a good drawing, anyone can see that, the crows are a particularly nice touch. You'll most likely be in the top 5 if not first place, good job.

Kamikaye responds:

Thanks for that insight review :D

I just watched 30 mins of diffrent madness submissions for research before doing this. And occasional episodes before that here and then. Im not really into the storyline , but I liked the style.
Jesus had too many details and space for his head with hair and beard, I wanted to lighten the pic up to the top ,so I kept him a standart guy with a halo.

[Stroll]

The apocalypse looks a little too pleasant.

I understand that it's a speed painting/exercise but why is the backround so bright? It's looks like summer, I don't know about you but I don't imagine as the apocalypse being all warm and fuzzy. Sure you darken it up a little with the hangman but it's so bright and nice. I imagine the apocalypse a little darker with dark clouds on the horizon and destroyed cities in the background. I do like the smoking man however. Though the face construction is a little weird and his eyes look like those of a crystal meth addict, beard down he's fine except for two issues. His right hand looks...off. As if it's outside of the sleeve but still not. And due to it looking like summer I don't know why he would have on a neck scarf, unless he likes keeping his neck warm. It's good however, considering it's a exercise.

BansheeIndian responds:

I'll definitely take the criticism on the face and the hand, that's fair enough.

As far as the other stuff goes I think it's a bit of an odd criticism. Like the content of the picture is just that, it is what it is. Maybe he's not cold maybe he's covering up from the heat, maybe he is on meth, maybe he's quitting meth cold turkey and he feels like he's freezing even if its warm outside. Maybe he's not around a city? That would explain why theres no city in the background.

Maybe after the end of the world there are still seasons and this scene happened in the summer?

I hope it doesn't sound like I'm irate, I'm not. I just think it would be silly to, let's just say, give a piece of madness art a more critical review because he doesn't have a neck or arms. That's just how he is. right?

Anyways I definitely see what you mean on that right hand it's bothering me now, i might have to fix it haha. I still can't quite place what's wrong with the face but when I get a handle on it I'll probably fix that too.

Thanks for the indepth review!

[just walking my octopus]

It's interesting.

First off, I find the page crease a little annoying but I guess that can't be helped assuming you drew that in your sketchbook. I find the wild style of cross hatching a little bit messy but it still works, amazingly.
My favorite feature of this drawing is the reaper drawing even though his robe is a little too baggy and makes him look a little fat/large, which is fine if that's what you were going for.
I'm fine with the octopus but I wish it was clearer to distinguish it's limbs since right now I mostly see a lot of suction cups and no creases between the legs of the non-visible side of the creature.
The background is nothing special but I do find myself liking the sky blue hue that you colored it with. Overall it's a good drawing that needs a little work that most people wouldn't be able to detect. Good job.
By the way, whats the thing to the side of the reaper's hood?

TreasurePlanet responds:

thank you so much for your in-depth critique. It's really appreciated.
What you said about the reaper's robes being to baggy was right on point and it brought my attention to things that i had not thought of.
I lost the octopus halfway through the sketch. It just got too messy and it was illegible. So i added a TON of suction cups in hopes that the viewer could tell what it was.

Once again, thanks so much for your critique.

-Joe

[ManDark]

It's alright.

The face looks a little weird though. The nose is so long that it seems to be pushing the mouth into the chin. The hair is weird and looks unnatural. He looks feminine. And he has a pretty big forehead. The ear should be smaller and lower in relation to the eyes as well.
But hey, practice makes perfect?

sweetyluli responds:

Thanks for the Crit. I haven't done a lot of realism XD so it's good to know these things XD" It was originally gunna be a CGed painting, but I decided to take it alittle further XD Thats why things epsecially are off XD"